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recognizable or obvious to a user within a particular interaction. Visiting a website may involve
the actors that contribute to operating that site, but also actors with network access,
which may include: Internet service providers; other network operators; local institutions providing
-a network connection including schools, libraries or universities; government intelligence services;
+a network connection including schools, libraries, or universities; government intelligence services;
malicious hackers who have gained access to the network or the systems of any of the other actors.
High-level threats including surveillance may be pursued by these actors. Pervasive monitoring,
a form of large-scale, indiscriminate surveillance, is a known attack on the privacy of users of the
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they are vulnerable or could become vulnerable, and an actor may have
no way of knowing that a person is vulnerable.
Some individuals may be more vulnerable to privacy risks or harm as a result of
-collection, misuse, loss or theft of personal data because:
+collection, misuse, loss, or theft of personal data because:
-- of their attributes, interests, opinions or behaviour;
+- of their attributes, interests, opinions, or behaviour;
- of the situation or setting (e.g. where there is information asymmetry or other
power imbalances);
- they lack the capacity to fully assess the risks;
@@ -1119,11 +1119,11 @@ Privacy Principles
Additional privacy protections may be needed for personal data of vulnerable
people or sensitive information which could cause
-someone to become vulnerable if their personal data is collected, used or
-shared (e.g. blocking tracking elements, sensor data or information about
+someone to become vulnerable if their personal data is collected, used, or
+shared (e.g. blocking tracking elements, sensor data, or information about
installed software or connected devices).
While sometimes others can help vulnerable people assess privacy risks and
-make decisions about privacy (such as parents, guardians and peers), everyone
+make decisions about privacy (such as parents, guardians, and peers), everyone
has their own right to privacy.
Some vulnerable people need a guardian to help them make good
decisions about their own web use (e.g. children, with their parents often
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Privacy Principles
captured in the same picture would prefer their participation not to be disclosed. Another example
of such issues are sites that enable people to upload their contacts: the person performing the
upload might be more open to disclosing their social networks than the people they are connected to
-are. Such issues do not necessarily admit simple, straightforward solutions but they need to be
+are. Such issues do not necessarily admit simple, straightforward solutions, but they need to be
carefully considered by people building websites.
While transparency rarely helps enough to inform the individual choices that people may
make, it plays a critical role in letting researchers and reporters inform our