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Editorial pass, 1. to 1.1.2 (fixes #298) #334

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net positive social benefit</i>" ([[?ETHICAL-WEB]], [[?design-principles]]). One of the ways in which the
Web serves people is by protecting them in the face of asymmetries of power, and this includes
establishing and enforcing rules to govern the power of data.
Web serves people is by protecting them from surveillance and the types of manipulation that data can
enable.
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We should use "should" rather than saying that it already serves people in this way. "The types of manipulation that data can enable" is also vague, and it could be more concrete as "from surveillance and from manipulation based on that surveillance."

Do we mean that the web should protect people from non-web surveillance? (It could, since people are harder to surveil over TLS than if they had to visit places, but this goal would imply that we could accept lower web privacy if it saved people from worse non-web surveillance.) Or do we just mean that the web shouldn't be easy to surveil?

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reaffirmed automatically with every interaction, it will take precedence in terms of specificity
over any general [=consent=] given to a site's processing, and will only be superseded by specific
[=consent=] obtained through a deliberate action taken by the user with the intent of overriding
their global opt-out.
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Merge in #296.

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I think it's already merged?

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It's merged to the main branch, but not into this text, and this text still says things about taking precedence that #296 removed.

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reaffirmed automatically with every interaction, it will take precedence in terms of specificity
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It's merged to the main branch, but not into this text, and this text still says things about taking precedence that #296 removed.

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